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I do not want you to tell me
of crooked smiles and offshore
moonbeams woven with nightingale
words. You are living in
after memories. You have forgotten
I will live in a way that's unorthodox.

I only want for you
to be lonely and small,
but it's for your own good, you know.

Breathe it in, hold it in, hold yourself
between each of your heartbeats.
Change because some things are
like estranged runaways caught between
the tilt of the earth.

I was the ocean in you
and you didn't understand.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013   Writer
This one is gorgeous. The way you put it together is so interesting -- I found myself having to read certain lines twice because they really made me think.
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IrrevocableFate Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013   Writer
:heart:! Thank you. I'm really glad you think so, and even more so that it made you think. It took me a while to find just the right lines from EsotericHeart's work [which was so hard, there were so many good ones!].
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013   Writer
:hug:
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TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
From "Breath it in" to the end is gold, baby.
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IrrevocableFate Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013   Writer
:heart: Thank you, I am fond of that last part myself. ♥
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AlayaRaye Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013
Very good. I really like the end. Good job. :heart::love:
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IrrevocableFate Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013   Writer
:glomp: Thank you so much, I'm really glad you do, ~EsotericHeart made it so easy with all her wonderful works. ♥
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doughboycafe Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Professional Writer
The last two lines are an absolute wow.


Challenging set up. Well done in making it come together how you did.
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IrrevocableFate Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013   Writer
:heart:! Oh golly you are so lovely, thank you.

It is, but it's so fun to get to read through all these wonderful poems and find a way to weave them into something else. ♥
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silvernium Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was the ocean in you
and you didn't understand.

:heart:
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