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If The Sun Could Whisper by *IrrevocableFate:iconIrrevocableFate:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


I watch as your
latex skin, folds
against the breezes
and then melts into
puddles of
solidified sunshine.

Your lips smacked
poison against mine;
with our first kiss
I was already dying.

My mouth was
filled with holes
that leaked words
of unused wisdom and

I pretended to wonder about
the constellations that you
erased with your thumb.

And about
your bones that
crashed into the earth.

But there were no
meteors to coat your fall.

How did you survive?
©2009 *IrrevocableFate
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Author's Comments

I'm always iffy about my poetry. But I do like this one. <3


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Wow, thank you to every one who's viewed, commented and(or) favorited. <3

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*TheFulkrum Jan 23, 2009, 11:49:30 AM
Ooh, more to it than meets the eye. I likey.

'...constellations that you
erased with your thumb...'

NICE! :thumbsup:

Lips, kisses, dying; we were both in the same mood when we posted today my friend!

I like it...girlie...18? :no: :sniff: :)

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=Birthstone Jan 23, 2009, 11:50:04 AM
:heart: it

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~midorii88 Jan 23, 2009, 11:52:29 AM
Very interesting.....I really like the feel and the imagery, yet I can't think of what it may be pertaining to.
I love being mystified (or ignorant - same diff, LOL!)! =D

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~Squirrelshters Jan 23, 2009, 12:34:37 PM
whoooaaaaaa..... :wow:

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when everything is
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you gotta take it
[IN]

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"A happy idiot."

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~novran Jan 23, 2009, 12:51:57 PM
Lovely! I especially love the first stanza, the imagery is fantastic and the words used fit perfectly. :+fav:!

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*orphicfiddler Jan 23, 2009, 12:57:23 PM
Lovely descriptions.

Your lips smacked/poison against mine got Alice Cooper's "Poison" song so stuck in my head. Also, "latex skin." I really like that.
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~Roxy-V-Ace Jan 23, 2009, 12:57:48 PM
your metaphors are really very beautiful
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~Knight-of-Khenma Jan 23, 2009, 1:44:08 PM
Wow, this is really interesting, I love it.

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When the lights go out and the battle is not done,
Take a deep breath, be strong, and take heed,
For a brave hero lies in everyone.
- Coll (Quest for Arinor)
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Mood: dA Love =FarmerEd Jan 23, 2009, 2:16:58 PM
Oh, I do love this one, too! Really well put together...

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~fashion-mc-sexypants Jan 23, 2009, 2:38:16 PM
I really like this, the first stanza is brilliant! amazing imagery :) great job

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